Comments for fluttering flowers... http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com drift on.. Fri, 08 Aug 2008 03:09:13 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Dialogue by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/dialogue/#comment-52 theredpants Fri, 08 Aug 2008 03:09:13 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?page_id=34#comment-52 Very good, very tense argument - and you maintain the tension well with peaks and dips in the dialogue. Well done! Very good, very tense argument – and you maintain the tension well with peaks and dips in the dialogue. Well done!

]]> Comment on Letter to the past by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/letter-to-the-past/#comment-51 theredpants Fri, 08 Aug 2008 03:05:28 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?page_id=29#comment-51 This is a good letter which shows exactly how you were like back then in contrast to how you are like now. Lots of material here to mine for your storytelling! Good job. This is a good letter which shows exactly how you were like back then in contrast to how you are like now. Lots of material here to mine for your storytelling! Good job.

]]> Comment on Visual Trigger by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/visual-trigger/#comment-50 theredpants Fri, 08 Aug 2008 02:58:33 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?page_id=23#comment-50 This is a good attempt at the greek tragedy convention where Andy causes his own downfall but I wonder if it can be changed to successfully milk more fear and pity from the reader. Right now, the story of Andy seems to be told in a pretty detached manner with little connection to the reader. This is a good attempt at the greek tragedy convention where Andy causes his own downfall but I wonder if it can be changed to successfully milk more fear and pity from the reader. Right now, the story of Andy seems to be told in a pretty detached manner with little connection to the reader.

]]> Comment on People Watch by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/people-watch/#comment-49 theredpants Fri, 08 Aug 2008 02:50:48 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?page_id=19#comment-49 Good descriptions - I think you already have two interesting potential stories there! Only thing is I would've liked to see more description of the physicality of the characters - very useful detail to have when crafting characters for stories. Good descriptions – I think you already have two interesting potential stories there! Only thing is I would’ve liked to see more description of the physicality of the characters – very useful detail to have when crafting characters for stories.

]]> Comment on 50 word stories by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/50-word-stories/#comment-48 theredpants Fri, 08 Aug 2008 02:48:16 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?page_id=17#comment-48 Your stories, although following the parameters of the assignment well, are lacking a certain element that makes them interesting. Would be good to try some more adventurous or even risky material - that'll really make your writing shine. Your stories, although following the parameters of the assignment well, are lacking a certain element that makes them interesting. Would be good to try some more adventurous or even risky material – that’ll really make your writing shine.

]]> Comment on The End..the end..the end..the end..the end?? by michelle http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/2008/08/04/the-endthe-endthe-endthe-endthe-end/#comment-47 michelle Wed, 06 Aug 2008 13:23:58 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-47 hoho. chocolate is chocolate! i will never forget that man! hahaha. :D hoho. chocolate is chocolate!

i will never forget that man! hahaha. :D

]]> Comment on The End..the end..the end..the end..the end?? by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/2008/08/04/the-endthe-endthe-endthe-endthe-end/#comment-46 theredpants Tue, 05 Aug 2008 04:09:44 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?p=36#comment-46 If Godzilla ever comes, I'll just have to put on my Ultraman suit and hope for the best. If Godzilla ever comes, I’ll just have to put on my Ultraman suit and hope for the best.

]]> Comment on The last ever blogpost here..? by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/2008/06/03/the-last-ever-blogpost-here/#comment-45 theredpants Tue, 05 Aug 2008 04:07:23 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?p=32#comment-45 Go watch "Into The Wild" - it's a film by Sean Penn starring a talented young actor named Emile Hirsch. It's got much to do with what you're blogging about here. Available in the library. Go watch “Into The Wild” – it’s a film by Sean Penn starring a talented young actor named Emile Hirsch. It’s got much to do with what you’re blogging about here. Available in the library.

]]> Comment on Backpack Traveling by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/2008/05/20/backpack-traveling/#comment-44 theredpants Tue, 05 Aug 2008 04:03:47 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?p=28#comment-44 Did you know the very first Lonely Planet guidebook was written and compiled in a hotel room in Singapore by the husband and wife you wrote about? Did you know the very first Lonely Planet guidebook was written and compiled in a hotel room in Singapore by the husband and wife you wrote about?

]]> Comment on LOL – the retarded comment by theredpants http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/2008/05/11/lol-the-retarded-comment/#comment-43 theredpants Tue, 05 Aug 2008 04:02:16 +0000 http://flutteringflowers.wordpress.com/?p=20#comment-43 ROTFLMAO ROTFLMAO

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